There are many ways to avoid health fraud. First, you should take a cure for your ill from a famous doctor or a doctor that you know. This can help you to stay away from a health fraud. Second, you ought to be patience and full of hope of that your illness will go. Patience will make you away from fraud. Finally, you should be a faithful on the god. The god is the one who generating us so that he helps us and cure us. These are just some of the way to avoid health fraud.
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Thanks, Altaf for posting your writing assignment. I enjoyed reading it but have noticed some sentences that need your attention.
ReplyDeleteHere is my feedback:
1) Your sentence: "you should take a cure for your ill from a famous doctor or a doctor that you know." I believe you meant to say "illness" not "ill", so please change it.
2) your sentence: "you ought to be patience and full of hope of that your illness will go.". You meant to say: "you ought to be patient and hopeful that your illness will go.", please correct it.
3)your sentence: "Patience will make you away from fraud." I believe you meant to say: "Patience will keep you away from health fraud."
4) your sentence: "you should be a faithful on the god.". Better say: "you should have faith in god."
5) your sentence: "The god is the one who generating us so that he helps us and cure us.". This sentence needs to be rewritten using the appropriate Tense. You have used Present Progressive in the first clause, and it should be in the past tense. Also, I believe you meant to say" created" not "generating"; so, please correct and rewrite your sentence.
6) in your last sentence: "These are just some of the way to avoid health fraud.", "way" should be in the plural "ways".
Thank you!